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“Ooh..what are all these mum? There are sho many of them. Ain’t they huge and funny”, the little one was clearly amused on his first trip to the shore.
“Shhh! Let’s go back home. They are trouble!”
“They don't like us mum? Why would they touble us? Didn’t you say that if we don’t touble others, nobody would touble us? Did we touble them mummy? ”. He was persistent.
“Oh, shut up, will ya Clawy? If you get caught, they will make a cake outta you! Turtly told me crab cakes are delicious.. ” momma crab shared her concern matter-of-factly.
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I love the twist at the end. I still had mermaids on mind so the crab thing was unexpected. Not so keen on "Clawy" as a name, thought it works.
ReplyDeleteThank you Alice! I know I should have done better with the names and toddler speak :) Glad you dropped by!
DeleteHey, that end was so unexpected, but too cute, for sure! You did great, Sampada! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Shilpa!! I somehow felt I didn't do justice to the idea..but your comment lifted my spirits!
DeleteLovely twist :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Freya!
DeleteCute story, Sampada. I wasn't expecting crabs.
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Thank you Rochelle!
DeleteThat was superb Sampada - loved Clawy :)
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Thank you Dahlia! So glad you liked it :)
DeleteDidn't expect the twist at the end. I thought it was humans talking till the crab cakes line and then I went back and read again :)
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Haha! That was the intention. Thanks for reading :)
DeleteOh that's cute and such a wonderful twist. Well done. Loved how you narrated :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Parul !! Glad you liked it :D
DeleteOh dear, I was planning on having dressed crab for dinner tonight, now I feel guilty! Thanks a bunch!Hehe!
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Haha!! Go ahead and gorge on the delicacy. I am sure clawy would understand :P thanks for reading Keith!!
DeleteRun, little crab, run. I found this cute and funny with a good twist. --Gah Learner
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it !
DeleteDefinitely didn't expect crabs! That was a cute and fun read! ^_^
ReplyDeleteThanks Darshana!! Glad you enjoyed it :)
DeleteI love where you went with this
ReplyDeleteThank you Siobhan!!
ReplyDeleteHeyya Sampada, you got liebbed in my blog!
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Yay! Let me go there right away!
DeleteLove the witty crab story and thanks for the Leibster award:)
ReplyDeleteSure! Thanks :)
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