Note: This post was written for Yeah Write Super Challenge. When I first read the prompt Pets, my heart sank because that was the last thing on my mind. I never had a pet nor any deep connection with them. So what should the personal essay be about?
But I am glad to announce that I qualified for the next round! I hope you like it.
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Coming from a typical Indian middle class family, each
day was a struggle for decent survival. Our everyday battles included fighting
the snail-paced traffic on roads, praying for a seat to empty in a crowded bus
and long power cuts that brought everything to a standstill, to name a few. You
would be drained out of energy by the time you came back home from your day’s
work.
Maybe that’s why, we never had any pets. Or so I always
thought. Not just us, but none of our relatives or close friends had any,
barring a rare few. There was just no energy or love left to show on another
creature. I am not speaking for all the Indian families, but a majority of them.
Pets never crossed our minds, and even if it did on rare occasions, it was
immediately shooed away by throwing a list of all-the-better-things-you-could-help-with-instead on our faces. It’s
not that we did not love animals. We were just not ready to having one more
thing to look after.
My first experience with pets, or rather a dog, was
fictional. Having grown up reading Enid Blyton’s Secret Seven, Famous Five and
the Five Find-Outers, Timmy, Scamper and Buster endearingly made their way into
my life. I laughed with the Secret seven on Scamper’s antics and cried with
Anne when Timmy broke his ear. I felt their wet kisses on my face and imagined
the warmth in their welcomes. I longed for somebody or something to adore me
like the way they did.
So when a stray puppy lost its way and ended up in our
apartment building, its brown watery eyes half-scared and half-mischievous, it
took us bunch of kids (my friends in the same building) little time to call it our own. It jumped and
yelped, and we played along. It licked our feet and we let it. We were thrilled
to have this new company and overjoyed to have someone who loved us so
unconditionally. But all of this didn’t change the fact that he was still not
allowed in our homes. I vaguely remember a night, I was sitting alone in the
corridor, cuddling Pandu (that’s what
we named him), picking fleas from his soft fur with my bare hands, caressing
him amidst soft purring sounds until the summons from home became persistent
and unavoidable.
And then we lost him. Just like that. In two days, a few
grown-up boys turned up at our door to claim Pandu. Word had spread that some
people were looking for him (thinking of it now, it amazes me how news spread
back then), and I had immediately picked him up in my arms and rushed home
hoping to save him from the goons. Yeah, we thought of them as goons, silly us.
We fought and pleaded and protested. Pandu was ours. He loved it here and
nobody could take him away from us. We couldn’t give him a home, but does it matter? We loved him. As it was being snatched away from me, the watery brown eyes
looked at me the same way it did when I first saw him.
Almost 15-16 years have passed since then. Though the
mindset hasn’t changed a great deal, an allowance was made to bring tiny new
beings into our lives. Ten little fish. Three Guppies, Three Tetra Serpae and
Four Zebra Daniels to be precise. There is a little story behind it. For some
reason, the husband developed a soft corner for fish. In his little mind, all
our home needed was a beautiful little aquarium to make it more beautiful. One
fine day, armed with researched information and strengthened resolve, we made a
trip to the Pet Mart to buy our first pet. After skimping through the many many
aisles, we finally brought home a 10-gallon aquarium and all the decorative
shells, sea-bed, and floral pieces. Yes, you read right. No fish yet. A certain
Nitrogen cycle has to be established first in the water, so the fish could
survive.
In the following days, our dining table became a make-shift laboratory every morning, as the husband’s first attention as soon as he opens his eyes, went towards testing the levels of ammonia-nitrite-nitrate. A series of test tubes, a color chart, some chemicals, a simple chemical test, pouring over the results and never coming to a common conclusion as to which shade of color it was closest to became a daily routine. The cycle of waking up each morning-testing the pH levels-feeling dejected–doing more research–more pacifying words formed a cycle of its own.
It amused me, how diligently and patiently he pursued it.
After two months, I stopped believing in his we-are-almost-there followed by just-a
couple-of-weeks statements. And then one day, after another month, I came from
office to find him excitedly watching the Zebras race each other in their new
home. He had finally done it and the happiness showed in his eyes.
Every morning and evening, he checks on them industriously. He pulls a chair by its side, resting his chin on the headrest and earnestly watches them skirt around in full frenzied movements. He drops them food and watches them race each other, nibbling at the tiny dried shrimp. And from a corner, I watch him. Amazed at how these little beings have his full attention. And amazed at how much love there is always left inside us.
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| Our little aquarium |
The main reason I participated in this paid challenge was that I would receive feedback from the judges. I had been yearning for some critique for sometime now and this provided exactly what I wanted. Here is what the judges had to say. I would be glad to hear from you too!
What the judges really liked about “No Pets Land”:
You've chosen a complex and compelling organizational structure flashing back to your childhood and drawing parallels to your husband's aquarium hobby. You did a great job drawing enough parallels between the two stories you were telling to make them seem like a coherent whole.
Where the judges found room for improvement:
Your essay would benefit from editing to tighten up your syntax, avoiding wordy phrases like "thinking of it now," "one fine day," etc. There are a few times when you are too cautious and overexplain things that you have adequately set up, like Pandu's name.
